Plain English

Discussion in 'General Questions' started by ddoherty, Aug 28, 2007.

  1. ddoherty

    ddoherty Bit poster

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    Hi,

    I think that it's time to replace the following stilted English:

    Warning: Parallels Tools initializing is in progress.
    Please do not turn off or reset the virtual machine,
    and do not perform any operations in the guest
    operating system until Parallels Tools initializing will
    be complete, because it may result in data loss.

    with

    Warning: Parallels Tools initialization is in progress.
    Please do not turn off or reset the virtual machine,
    and do not perform any operations in the guest
    operating system until Parallels Tools initialization
    has completed, because it may result in data loss.

    Dave D.
     
  2. spectre

    spectre Parallels Team

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    270
    Thank you, I've notified our interface-responsible people about it.
     
    Last edited: Aug 29, 2007
  3. David5000

    David5000 Pro

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    312
    Yes, except you didn't go quite far enough:

    1) "Do not turn off" instead of "Please do not turn off." ("Please" does not fit this context, especially after "Warning.")

    2) "until Parallels Tools initialization is complete. Doing so may result in data loss." (Avoids awkward construction with "because." Also, "complete" is a transitive verb.)

    David
     

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